Amazon won’t let me publish this review on their site, even though I have bought the book and was nuanced with my words. Funny, that.
In the context of reading this on a blog, I guess this is a short letter to the author of Echo:
I chose to read this book in order to support fellow self-published authors. The following is just my opinion, so, no matter what I say, I don’t want you to feel less about your art. It’s yours, first and foremost, and that’s all that truly matters in the end.
I did not care for this book. It seems to be 80% descriptions, and most of those descriptions are of things that don’t truly need so much description, like half a chapter of a character putting rotting fruit in the garbage. That was the point where I couldn’t read any further.
I chose not to read any reviews of this book until I read the book myself, but after I couldn’t stand to read any more, I finally read some reviews, and the more honest ones confirmed everything I assumed about the remainder. According to them, yes, there is massive over-describing, hardly any actual world-building, hardly any engaging character development, and the book stops abruptly for the sake of enticing readers to buy the next product – er, I mean to buy the ‘next entry in the series.’ Maybe they’re dishonest, and the narrative became focused later on, and I’m going to miss out on that, but I doubt it.
What I read didn’t feel like a story that needed to be told. It gave me the feeling that you spent more time focused on impressing the reader with verbiage rather than telling an interesting story.
But, if you’re proud of your work, then continue to be proud. This is just the opinion of some random guy you’ve never met. Rarely is any author’s first book their best, especially when it was self-published. I can attest. With my first book, Remnant, I read it over occasionally and think I was too wordy at times, or sometimes not descriptive enough. I don’t give this review 2 stars because of its flaws, but because it felt like a product the whole time, not a soulful expression … AS WELL AS how much effort was required just to get to the next paragraph, and the fact the next paragraph rarely moved the story forward.
If you publish more stories, I will check them out. I don’t think any one book is indicative that an author will never improve. I just don’t expect it from this trilogy.